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Readers, though, the way that I look at it is this: Would the hook itself interest you in reading the book. If yes, what interests you and if not, what would you change to make it more appealing?
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Start of the query with prefatory note for blog readers: While this is not a romance, there is a romantic thread, which I do not mention in the query (although I do mention it in my synopsis).
Dear xxx:
Chuck McManis has been through all this before. He just doesn’t know it yet.
During the summer of 1877, the Nez Perce Indians, fleeing from the US Army, passed through Yellowstone National Park on their way to sanctuary in Canada. Along the way, they inadvertently kidnapped a party of tourists. But one of these tourists is not what he appears to be.
Chuck is from eighty years in the future. A geological anomaly where the web of time is thin has flung him back to a place where he is forced to become a hero. Whether he thinks he can be one or not.
Repeating History is a 120,000 word historical adventure novel with fantasy elements.
May I send you the complete manuscript?
Sincerely,
xxx
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