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Readers, though, the way that I look at it is this: Would the hook itself interest you in reading the book. If yes, what interests you and if not, what would you change to make it more appealing?
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(Agent Name)
(Agent Address)
Dear (name):
This is a fiction Running from your Past fifty-one chapter’s and about two hundred pages. The book follows Samantha in her search for peace an escape from the sister she lost and the torment of her own mind in dealing with what she has become.
Her life fell apart in a single moment and five years later she is still running from the truth. Somehow the past always seems to catch up with you and now it seems to have caught up to her and the illusion she has built around herself and falling to pieces.
Samantha is a cold-blooded killer paid to hit her mark but after five years she is still unable to let go of her sister. It is career choice she never envisioned for herself but that was five years ago when Lilly was still alive. A time when Marcus didn’t control her as if a puppet on the end of a string. She lets her legs carry her away always running from her demons intertwined in the whispers of her dead. She is now torn between the only piece of her past left and a new beginning a way out but before she can chose she must find out who waits for her in the shadows before her own time runs out.
She is torn between Kyle the one she left behind has now found his way back into her life, however he is being played as if a pawn easy to move and expendable. Michael the one with the empty eyes who only wants to save her from the life she had come to know and a death not even she can run from.
She is led down a path with more turns than she can see with more deception than she has ever known. The truth that she had been searching for all these years will not only shatter the world she has come to know but promises to leave her breathless.
My name is xxxxxx I have been writing for years however this will be the first that I have summated to an agent. I am a full time student at xxxxxx University. I am an avid reader of many genreas’ and love creating something new that I believe others will enjoy just as much. Thank you for your time and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
xxxxx
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